Meh... Something's Not Right...
Be very careful with your styles; you've got a slow Jazzy ballad drum line, which is a great take on this song. And taking liberties with tempos is what makes Jazz... Jazz! However, some of your sync notes didn't feel right. Always try to mix what feels right and fluid, don't force it.
I also agree with the below statement; around 00:45 the octaves didn't work. It felt like you ran out of ideas :(
I encourage you to revisit this piece again. It's a creative idea, I just don't think it was executed properly.
Don't give up! Keep at it!